1B- English - Writer Hints

Lesson: Literacy

Model Tex

Hermelin the Detective Mouse
Hermelin is a detective mouse that lives in Emily’s attic at number 33
Offley Street. He is an adventurous mouse who loves to solve
mysteries. One Monday morning, the residents of Offley Street were
in a real flap! Some of their precious belongings had gone missing!
Their priceless diamonds, reading glasses and loved pets. They had
all disappeared! Luckily, Hermelin was able to find all the items that
the residents had lost.
He set about writing to each of the people on Offley Street to tell
them where their belongings had gone. They were so thrilled they
decided to have a party and wrote an invitation to him. Now they
could meet Hermelin and thank him.
The next day, Hermelin read the letter and was excited. He felt a bit
nervous. But when the people realised he was a mouse they were
mean. They shouted ‘What a horrid mouse that is!’ Things got
knocked over and Hermelin was nearly injured. They didn’t like mice
because mice were pests! Hermelin ran for his life.
Eventually, he made it all the way back to Emily’s attic. Hermelin
knew it was now time for him to leave Offley Street and sadly went
to sleep. Early the next morning, there was a mouse-sized note that
had been left for him while he slept. The note was from Emily and
she wanted Hermelin to work with her. The were to be detectives
together. Hermelin and Emily became the best detectives in the
land. Where will their next detective adventure take them?

Children had to work in pairs to read the 'Model Text' and identify and give exmaples of the writer hints. This included:

-phrases to help move the story on  

- noun phrases to describe important objects  (adjectives to describe a noun)

- exclamation  marks to make some  sentences stand out 

- end the story with a question 

- words that join ideas together - because, and  (conjunctions)

- use story language